Music Video Draft 5 and Feedback

Sheffield Examiner Feedback

• Excellent start, smooth camera work especially when he walks through the car park and I like the water dripping in time to the music, camera is amazing by the way - looks crisp and professional.
• The attack sequence is spoilt by the fact that the girl seems to be smiling and not actually convincing in her "acting."
• Camerawork in the car and around the car is excellent, looks professional at times and I like they have someone who actually looks like a medic.
• The blank background works at first but then becomes overused to the point of being repetitive, different backgrounds - appearing at the car park etc might have been better plan because then the singer could become more involved in the narrative rather than being a crutch to keep cutting back to.
• The bit where he keeps cutting between the guy on the wall and the time lapse becomes a bit over used, although the lip synching video is excellent.
• Pity when he gets home "late at night" the clock in the background is saying about half five, suggests to me they shot straight after school.
• Took me ages work out why he gives her the earbuds at the end, not exactly something I would lose sleep over is it? Stakes should be higher?
• Some excellent work here but the narrative of the video is a bit confused and a little bit repetitive. 

In order to improve our video we will edit the clock on the wall to a later time, find something else to add into the time-lapse instead of Ben lip syncing and find a way to make it clearer that it is a necklace and not ear buds that is causing the problem.

Also it is not just the necklace that they are both loosing sleep over, Ben is consumed with guilt for not attempting to stop the mugging from taking place and Amy is completely shaken up by the fact that she was attacked thus making them not able to sleep.

Michael, Sophie