Music Video Draft 2 and Feedback

Here is the second draft for our music video. We have taken into account the feedback we were given about the first draft - it is unclear that the main character is not the mugger. To fix this, we have included reaction shots of the main character seeing the mugging and panicking and then driving off in fear. It was unclear, originally, why he drove off and it could be mistakenly interpreted as him fleeing the scene after he, himself, mugs the woman. 



The main piece of feedback we have received about this draft is that we need to make it more clear that the mugger steals the woman's necklace, as the rest of the video hinges on this point. We will do this by including a close up of the necklace being stolen, as we have left this shot out of the draft.

Mrs Wilcox - Feedback

• Lovely use of lighting
• Still not sure about the attack at start
• Too long on clouds second time

Classmate - Feedback

• Victim is only seen at beginning and end, this makes her forgettable

Nathan, Michael